The One Page Dungeon Contest submissions are being read and discussed by the judges in private but if you have a submission you'd like to get a paragraph of review and feedback on, let me know. I'm happy to write a few words on this page.
Sundial Siphon: I love the myconid picture and map; I had to read the part about the rotating map multiple times and I'm still not sure it really contributes to the game. Sometimes doors cannot be opened, sometimes some rooms cannot be reached, but I'd have to see it at the table. I liked the colour coding of monsters and connections. It says twice "Takes some time to clear" but it's unclear what the drawback is since there are no random encounters? Is it a quarter rotation? Reading the Siphon makes me think that after 4 phases all player characters are trapped in constructs? That seems rather harsh. The dungeon says that that players are racing against the clock but I think players wouldn't know that, so some sort of warning might be apt? There's a warning in room 4 but I feel a better warning is required, or the siphon should only affect room 5? In any case, the dungeon seems promising! 😄
Epona's Temple: I love the idea of achieving a permanent blessing of Epona. The map is beautiful. I feel that the map doesn't make clear which of the obstacles are easy to sidestep. Can people go from 3 to 5 without crossing 4 or 8? In 4 there's a presence of insects but it wasn't clear to mean what that entails since there are no insect stats. From a logic perspective the abandoned camp is puzzling. In any case, the rewards at the end are my favourite thing. They match the premise at the entrance and the theme of the temple itself. Love that. *E gostei muito de ver um versão que não seja Inglesa. Muito bem feito!* 😄
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